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    Originally posted by billsfanone
    Yeah, smoking is bad. I get it. I'm just trying to help you. Consider me the Bill Parcells of essays.

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    Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
    what college? where you ina ferternity?
    Slippery Rock University
    No Fraternity...

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    gets my vote for worst grammar award


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    did you read the revised one?:pimp:

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    Listen to BF1-

    He proof reads papers for a living.




    You have a choice, BOA. Get upset when people point out the 500 mistakes, or learn from it. "It's readable" is a long way from "It will pass" .

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    But a big for you to come here and ask for help. Think of us as 50 substitute parents.


    How about you and Uncle Dozer light one up over a few beers?

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    Originally posted by Dozerdog
    But a big for you to come here and ask for help. Think of us as 50 substitute parents.


    How about you and Uncle Dozer light one up over a few beers?
    id rather keep that thought outta my head......

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    Originally posted by Dozerdog

    You have a choice, BOA. Get upset when people point out the 500 mistakes, or learn from it. "It's readable" is a long way from "It will pass" .
    but bf1 doesnt understand im in 10th grade :).

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    Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
    but bf1 doesnt understand im in 10th grade :).
    In all honesty, and not to be mean, your grammar skills should be better than that in 10th grade though I found a lot fewer errors in the second version than I did the first. That shows you're making noticeable improvements. You did do a good job with the research though

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    Originally posted by The_Philster
    In all honesty, and not to be mean, your grammar skills should be better than that in 10th grade. You did a good job with the research though
    grammar sucks. i got a 73 on a grammar test today. thats not that bad.

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    Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
    grammar sucks. i got a 73 on a grammar test today. thats not that bad.
    Yeah...but you want to always strive to do the best. Don't settle for a 73...work on earning that 93 or better.

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    Originally posted by The_Philster
    Yeah...but you want to always strive to do the best. Don't settle for a 73...work on earning that 93 or better.
    LOL you cant just get a 93 ........its not that easy you have to do more than study...you have to be natruallly smart.

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    That's just 4 above failure- I want to see you get at least an 80-

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    a 69 aint failing. 59 and below is failing.

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    BOA, I could go through your revision and still find bunches of errors grammatically and spelling-wise, but I won't - would take too long. Your summations are ok, but you should maybe check out the new studies on second-hand smoke.

    Ummmm, can't resist - check out your first sentence. I think you mean "Smoking cigarettes IS bad for you..." not "are" bad for you. :)

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    Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
    a 69 aint failing. 59 and below is failing.
    The last year I was in High Scholl failure was a 70 or below.

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    I'd like to nominate this thread into the BFZ HOF. I'm laughing so hard my stomach hurts.

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    poor BOA!

    Smoking doesn't lead to other drugs...people do.
    I didn't come here to fight, I hate fighting. Life is way too short to spend it on fighting! Go fight with yourself, one of you will eventually win!

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    Originally posted by Dozerdog
    But a big for you to come here and ask for help. Think of us as 50 substitute parents.


    How about you and Uncle Dozer light one up over a few beers?
    Keep your pants on around "Uncle Dozer" if you get my drift

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    Hey BOA, I just had my 11th grade daughter read this. Here's what she had to say.

    1. It's too repetitive, and you have at least 10 sentences that start with the word 'smoking'.
    2. Grammar & spelling are part of EVERY rubric.
    3. You combined facts & opinions, where the latter should only be in your argument.
    4. Agree's that it'll only get you a low B or C grade.

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