PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

[LtBillsFan66]

your hurting the people

Should be

You're hurting people

There are still a million mistakes.

[Patrick76777]

it's better

[THATHURMANATOR]

Originally posted by mchurchfie


That is a very disturbing thought.

WTF I am a college grad!!!!

[BillsOwnAll]

Originally posted by ticatfan
Billsownall.don't let bf1 get you down,he is a little hard on you but he is right.You got all the facts ,but it sounds like a 10th grader.Your approach needs work.

i just look at his grammar corrections...if i could get in the No TOS TWZ. thne id lay smackdown on him but. right now ihe doesnt bother me lol. he doesnt understand this isnt a collge essay. well let him thinks what he wants hehe.

[BillsOwnAll]

Originally posted by THATHURMANATOR
WTF I am a college grad!!!!

what college? where you ina ferternity?

[LtBillsFan66]

Is it o-zone or ozone?

[LtBillsFan66]

Originally posted by Patrick76777
it's better

From an f to a d- maybe.

[BillsOwnAll]

reading over the what this essay says........i donot see anywhere on the rubric nything about grammar mistakes.... so if it is readable WHICH IT IS. i had a fellow 10th grader read it he said he read it fine. so its a good essay should get me a low b high C.

[LtBillsFan66]

There are not many arguments why smoking is good because its not.

It's not its.

[BillsOwnAll]

Originally posted by billsfanone
From an f to a d- maybe.

ok i sick of you talking **** about it go post somewhere eklse please.
for someone who thinks its so bad you musta read it 10 timnes already. maybe you can learn something from it!

[LtBillsFan66]

Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
reading over the what this essay says........i donot see anywhere on the rubric nything about grammar mistakes.... so if it is readable WHICH IT IS. i had a fellow 10th grader read it he said he read it fine. so its a good essay should get me a low b high C.

It's not readable. It's laughable though.

If I was your teacher, I would spit on you.

[LtBillsFan66]

Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
ok i sick of you talking **** about it go post somewhere eklse please.
for someone who thinks its so bad you musta read it 10 timnes already. maybe you can learn something from it!

Yeah, smoking is bad. I get it. I'm just trying to help you. Consider me the Bill Parcells of essays.

[BillsOwnAll]

Originally posted by billsfanone
It's not readable. It's laughable though.

If I was your teacher, I would spit on you.

my teacher is a 27 year old women with a fro!. she wont spit on me she doesnt even yell EVER.

[mchurchfie]

Originally posted by THATHURMANATOR
WTF I am a college grad!!!!

[mchurchfie]

Originally posted by BillsOwnAll
my teacher is a 27 year old women with a fro!. she wont spit on me she doesnt even yell EVER.

Must be the