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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by billsfanone
    Did you get my neg?

    yeah...thanks.
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    Christ, you are the queerest person in the history of Bills fanhood. I swear to god I would stomp you.

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by honey
    BOA, I could go through your revision and still find bunches of errors grammatically and spelling-wise, but I won't - would take too long. Your summations are ok, but you should maybe check out the new studies on second-hand smoke.

    Ummmm, can't resist - check out your first sentence. I think you mean "Smoking cigarettes IS bad for you..." not "are" bad for you. :)
    I was wondering when someone would point out that there's already an error in the 3rd word of the essay. Plus it is very generous of Honey to comment on this in a friendly-like way, considering the overall thesis.

    Maybe we should just re-write the essay, each taking a paragraph?

    The least painful way to improve your grammar is to start reading books for fun. You can pick topics you like, fiction or non-fiction, and you will pretty much be exposed to correct grammar naturally.

    "For years the deadly tendrils of cigarette smoke wafted through most American homes and businesses. That began to change with the Surgeon General's report..."


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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    wow, this is a blast from the past!
    I didn't come here to fight, I hate fighting. Life is way too short to spend it on fighting! Go fight with yourself, one of you will eventually win!

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Do we know if he got into college?

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by Discotrish
    Do we know if he got into college?

    Patti
    It's not THAT old a thread

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by Discotrish
    Do we know if he got into college?

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    I don't know. I heard he was accepted to a wide variety of prisons.

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by RedEyE
    I don't know. I heard he was accepted to a wide variety of prisons.
    Haha. Well cigarettes are hot commodities in prison.

    Actually if he was in 10th grade in Jan 2004, he'd be starting his freshman year of college right now. Or are we assuming he'd be held back due to his essay-writing skills?

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by The_Philster
    It's not THAT old a thread
    Oh but it is though... The thread was started in January 04, he was in 10th grade. Which means in Jan 05 he was a junior and Jan 06, he was a senior. Which means he'd be just starting as a freshmen in college a few weeks ago. That's all based on the idea that he got much better at writing and actually passed each grade and what not...

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Hm..I forgot he was that old...I was thinking he wasn't in 10th grade when he wrote that...but that he was in his 10th year

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Suuuuuuuuuuuure Phil... everybody in the US school system counts the years they've been in school instead of what grade they are in. A likely story indeed!

    Sorry, I just wanted an excust to say ROFL

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Actually, I meant years since birth

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by The_Philster
    Actually, I meant years since birth
    Oh God... if that were the case then those guys were rediculously brutal to him!

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by BlackMetalNinja
    Oh God... if that were the case then those guys were rediculously brutal to him!
    consider who some of those people are

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by The_Philster
    consider who some of those people are
    Get all the fools on your side and you can be elected to anything.
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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by billsfanone
    Drop out of school and take up a trade.
    I wonder if he ever ended up becoming a Black Smith?

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by Discotrish
    Do we know if he got into college?

    Patti
    Yeah. He's the new janitor there. He has a set of keys and everything.

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Quote Originally Posted by billsfanone
    Yeah. He's the new janitor there. He has a set of keys and everything.
    The problem is that if you take his keys and shake them in front of him he gets all mesmerized and just stares at them while mouthing the word "shinny"

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    Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY

    Moving this to HoF Now!!!

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