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Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY
yeah...thanks.
Originally posted by billsfanone
yeah...thanks.
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Originally posted by yordad
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Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY
I was wondering when someone would point out that there's already an error in the 3rd word of the essay. Plus it is very generous of Honey to comment on this in a friendly-like way, considering the overall thesis.Originally posted by honeyBOA, I could go through your revision and still find bunches of errors grammatically and spelling-wise, but I won't - would take too long. Your summations are ok, but you should maybe check out the new studies on second-hand smoke.
Ummmm, can't resist - check out your first sentence. I think you mean "Smoking cigarettes IS bad for you..." not "are" bad for you. :)
Maybe we should just re-write the essay, each taking a paragraph?
The least painful way to improve your grammar is to start reading books for fun. You can pick topics you like, fiction or non-fiction, and you will pretty much be exposed to correct grammar naturally.
"For years the deadly tendrils of cigarette smoke wafted through most American homes and businesses. That began to change with the Surgeon General's report..."
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wow, this is a blast from the past!I didn't come here to fight, I hate fighting. Life is way too short to spend it on fighting! Go fight with yourself, one of you will eventually win!Comment
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Do we know if he got into college?
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It's not THAT old a threadOriginally posted by DiscotrishComment
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I don't know. I heard he was accepted to a wide variety of prisons.Originally posted by DiscotrishComment
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Haha. Well cigarettes are hot commodities in prison.Originally posted by RedEyE
Actually if he was in 10th grade in Jan 2004, he'd be starting his freshman year of college right now. Or are we assuming he'd be held back due to his essay-writing skills?
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Oh but it is though... The thread was started in January 04, he was in 10th grade. Which means in Jan 05 he was a junior and Jan 06, he was a senior. Which means he'd be just starting as a freshmen in college a few weeks ago. That's all based on the idea that he got much better at writing and actually passed each grade and what not...Originally posted by The_Philster
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Hm..I forgot he was that old...I was thinking he wasn't in 10th grade when he wrote that...but that he was in his 10th yearComment
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Suuuuuuuuuuuure Phil... everybody in the US school system counts the years they've been in school instead of what grade they are in. A likely story indeed!
Sorry, I just wanted an excust to say ROFL
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Actually, I meant years since birth 
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Oh God... if that were the case then those guys were rediculously brutal to him!Originally posted by The_PhilsterActually, I meant years since birth Comment
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consider who some of those people areOriginally posted by BlackMetalNinja
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Originally posted by The_Philsterconsider who some of those people are
Get all the fools on your side and you can be elected to anything.
- Frank Dane
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Re: PLEASE grade my essay SERIOUSLY
I wonder if he ever ended up becoming a Black Smith?Originally posted by billsfanone
Get all the fools on your side and you can be elected to anything.
- Frank Dane
"The democracy will cease to exist when you take away from those who are willing to work and give to those who are not."
-Thomas Jefferson
The rule is perfect: in all matters of opinion our adversaries are insane.
- Mark Twain
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